Tuesday, May 5, 2009

Haliey M

Please reflect on the presentation leaving constructive criticism and positive feedback.

20 comments:

Wilberry09 said...

very strong intro i love the way you decided not to use a powerpoint just like anyone else, it puts you apart which is great! i love the girlscout cookies message and the stupid middleschool nonsense and the fact that you are the sympathetic one, i am like that as well. i am glad you conveyed your message in the way you did, the fact that you are who you are and know what you want to be. you were completely honest and you knew that the choices you make are going to effect everything in the future. great use of words. could possibly have used technology more effectively.

SarahE2010 said...

Your sunglasses are cute!I really liked the style of your presentation. Your word choice, and how you organized your presentation was really good.My only suggestion to you would be make the most out of college, and keep being yourself!

Lauren L said...

This is a great speech! I can totally picture you being the nice girl in school.
Following God and knowing what you stand for is very important.

Your faith in God is so strong.
Good luck in the future!

SaraB2009 said...

We are all weird! i love it! I think the way you put your presentation together was amazing! I love how you put that you arent in any cliques that you are just Haliey Moore. It is cool that your religion was such a big part of your last lecture.

shellim2009 said...

I fit into wierd! :) I really liked how you told your stories. They are a great way to connect to us, especially in the 3rd person way you depicted. I agree with you on the titles too! People shouldn't label others because then, like you said, it puts restraints on personalities and freindships. Congratulations on chosing Seattle too! I liked how you kept the 'Hailey Moore' theme too, it was a good way to stay true to yourself, the "beautiful mosiac" as God created you. My one suggestion is to maybe tell more stories, reading off your cards a little less. Otherwise you did a fantastic job!

Pat said...

You had great emotion and enthusiasm in your presentation which kept me engaged. The projection of your voice really grabbed my attention. I thought it was cool how you approached this lecture by being sarcastic and outlined the theme of individualism. I loved the quote about how you are broken and picking up the pieces. Great job

mollyp2010 said...

I loved your speech! I can identify completely with what you were saying about not exactly fitting in, but not minding. Your expression of your love for God was very powerful too. I know exactly what you meant about being ridiculous and wanting to be remembered that way. You seemed a little nervous, but I think everyone is doing this...great job!

Wilberry09 said...

i take it back the technology was great i loved the movie! and of course jimmy eat world

Anna P2009 said...

Good strong beginning. Seemed like a monologue!
You could've strayed away from your note cards. You stuttered trying to get back to your memorized phrase when you could've just gone off.
Great presentation. You seemed very confident up there.
Talked quickly at times but I was still able to understand you.
Good luck at SPU! You'll do great there!
Visual Aspect- I loved the movie! That is so cool!! You are so good and editing movies!

Knicastro said...

Good job. That was the most thought out and well rehearsed one yet. It's obvious that you wanted to give a clear image of who you were so you put alot of effort into this.

That movie was incredible!

KatieO2010 said...

This was a great lecture. Your personality really shone through, mostly because of the lack of power point. Everything flowed together nicely and all revolved around your central point. And that video was AMAZING.

TaylorS2009 said...

It's great that you kept your presentaton so simple while you were talking. It gave it a stronger message. The video at the end was a great way to tie together what you had said. Overall I thought it was really good! Good luck in Seattle!

TomB said...

good attention-getter. very strong language. i'm a little confused from your jumping around, thoughts seem a little jumbled. loved the video!

JakeF said...

I love how you presented your speech, instead of the slideshows you presented as Haliey Moore instead of as someone else and that is what your presentation was about. I like how you incorporated your religion into it because that’s what you care about. The showing after your speech was also indifferent and interesting, I really enjoyed that aspect.

KatieM2009 said...

I like your points about cliques and labels, its so true that not every person fits into those cliques.I also really liked that you chose to bring your religious beliefs to the table, they truely show who you are! Your visual aid was absolutely amazing!!! How did you do that??

Kim C. 2010 said...

Amazing transitions and ideas. You are an amazing speaker, you have wowed me! I really cant think of much you did wrong, maybe just a little more memorization. The visual was COMPLETELY AWESOME!!! I cant wait to see what you accomplish.

KaitlanW2009 said...

I liked how you approached it as almost a play, or a show you were putting on.
I have always been a peace maker myself, I understand how hard that could be at times.
It sounds like you were a good friend, not necessarily a pushover.
I liked that you talked about titles and labels, and showed us where you stand in cliques, and how you are labeled.
I like that you told us exactly who you are, and what you have done and plan to do with you life.
I love that you talked about choices. I also liked the idea that high school itself is a choice, you choose who you are, what you do, and why you do it.
Your presentation was amazing and I especially loved the video in the end.

RickM2009 said...

You were loud and got my attention. I liked your jumps between the first person reflections on stories told in the third person. The movie could have been cued up earlier, but was really well done!!

AdrienneB2009 said...

Too many people....the concrete friend! Listening makes you a great friend. Powell did made a lot of people forget their good qualities.
Your Life...according to Hailey!
Weighing what's really important let's you live!
Seattle is beauitful!
You're only human, we all need someone to lean on.
Great lecture!
Your flip book was way to cool! My mind is blown away..you definately know what you're doing with a camera!

MackenzieL2009 said...

You have good public speaking skills! You talk loud and clear and are a good storyteller. I can totally relate to your experiences: peacemaker, listener goody-two shoes. I love how you have become able to look past your "labels" and have chosen to become who you and God want you to be! I like how you brought up how our choices make up who we are, and what you have chosen. You did a great job being brave and telling us who you really are. You are fabu-tastic Hailey! Oh wait- movie!! The movie was so EPIC that was so good!