Tuesday, May 5, 2009

Lauren B

Please reflect on the presentation leaving constructive criticism and positive feedback.

20 comments:

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RickM2009 said...

Nice use of visual aid, I never knew you wanted to be a photographer. The presentation didn't seem very scripted, and even though you delivered it as more of a presentation than a speech, it worked. Toyotas are great trucks.

shellim2009 said...

I think photography is so cool! I have a lot of respect for people with creative muses, and photography is a great way to express that. I agree that you are a leader on the volley ball court, because you totally onw! :)I also think it's incredible that you got into the Coast Guard Acadamy, with sports as well. It's an incredible honor and you definitely deserve it. I've known you since freshman year and you are a very hard worker so this is a great start for you! Congratulations on everything!

KatieM2009 said...

Lauren- I think that is soo cool you wanted to be National Geographic photographer that would be great!! I cant believe you going to the coast gaurd! I think that is the most anmazing thing!!! Your presentation was so real and I think you made a great first impression for this whole presentation.

Anna P2009 said...

Talk slower, it's kinda difficult to understand you and process what you say when you are rushing through it.
I like that you mentioned that your love of sports came from your brother.
Be more creative with your transitions.
I like all the pictures. The slide show really ties things together.
You have amazing dreams I really hope things work out for you.

SarahE2010 said...

Lauren- It is so cool that you are going to be in the Coast Guard!! Although your summer will be shorter, spending a couple months on a boat will be so much fun. Your presentation was really nice, especially the pictures. The one thing that I would suggest would be to slow down just a touch. Great Job!

MackenzieL2009 said...

I think it's so cool you want to be a national geographic photographer!I think you had really good job talking clearly and I liked how you used your powerpoint to put pictures up etc. The only thing I would try to fix is talk to the audience more than the powerpoint screen. I hope you get to travel and live on your adventure side! Good luck!

TomB said...

like the dreams, very ambitious and real. very full set of goals and good connections between them. visual aides were excellent. you seemed a little tense but thats expected in a project like this.

TaylorS2009 said...

I think it is awesome that you will be in the coast guard and want to design boats. It is a really close job to being a photographer. Good luck in boot camp! Overall, your presentation was good, some parts you did talk fast though.

AdrienneB2009 said...

Awesome dream job!
Fantastic athlectic role model
That's great that your parents are so supportive!
Coast Guard is awesome and hardcore and it's great you get to do the things you love and strive for.
Don't forget about Colorado after you go all those cool places and experience cool things!

SaraB2009 said...

I think it is so cool that you are going to the coast guard acadamy! That takes a lot of self disipline. You had great connections to your childhood dreams! Good job and congrats on volleyball!

mollyp2010 said...

I've always wanted to work for national geographic too!! It pretty much seems like the ideal job. I can relate to what you were saying about coming to Arapahoe and being the new kid, and then becoming a leader to the new new kids. It always seems strange to me how time passes, and roles change. I think it's so amazing that you are going to the coast guard academy! That is completely different from anything I want to do, but it is so admirable and so cool that you have dreams like that that you are pursuing. The only thing I think you could work on is just relaxing. This is nerve-racking for anyone though, so great job!

Knicastro said...

You started off going pretty quickly but you slowed down and got into the groove after that. I liked your media, it kept things going smoothly and it didn't distract you.

I also like how you didn't script it. It kept it more conversational and less formal.

Well Done

HaileyM2009 said...

It was cool to see how your personality developed and has led you to where you are now.
Maybe you could've added a little advice for the people watching, but other than that it was fun to see where you've been and how that's brought you to where you are!
It was also awesome that you had to leave really fast to go sign with the coast guard! :)
I also want to be a photographer, good luck with that!!

KaitlanW2009 said...

I think that your dream to be a National Geographic Photographer is awesome! That's not something you hear of everyday.
It is really cool that you were on varsity volleyball for so many years.
Good luck in the coast guard. :)
I loved the last slide, it gave a good portrayal of what you wanted to do with your life in the future. I hope everything works out well for you.
The only thing that you may have wanted to do was make it a little bit longer, and memorized the slides a bit more, other than that the presentation was great.

JakeF said...

Did a great job of making eye contact and going from slide to slide didn’t need cards and that was really good. You had great flow throughout the presentation. You seem to have led an exciting life so far and it looks as though it is only going to get more exciting. The only constructive criticism have is we are all people and were not judging so breathe and have fun.

Lauren L said...

I really liked this presentation. It wasnt just reading from a paper there were visuals so we could all get an idea. Bringing back previos information from earlier was really good.

Pat said...

I think you did a great job on your presentation especially the power point. The presentation seemed to flow very well and I could tell it was well prepared. The pictures in your power point had great visuals to show the experiences you have had and are going towards.

KatieO2010 said...

I thought your presentation was really cool. You did a good job presenting your life and looking forward. It's awesome that you're going to have such a fun and exciting future if everything goes as planned. The presentation was good, but a little choppy and very focused on the power point.

Wilberry09 said...

National geographic-phenomenal i love the fact that you are a photographer and interested in creative arts are you planning on doing this in college? The volleyball life is the life for you, it creates leadership qualities and a love for connection. I love how you included your friends in there because friends are really what drive you, what makes your life what it is. The traveling life is a hard one but i think for you the happiness resides in traveling, taking pictures and just being with the ones you love and wide open water as a medium for that love. Overall great presentation. Could be a little bit more enthusiastic with presentation-get people involved, but thats my only constructive criticism :]